He questions why people are unkind
Why people are treated this way
We are all human and bleed the same
Is this not what does us bind?
Why are people so cruel he does say?
Do they somehow have others to blame?
Family and friends can be worse he finds
They backbite and compete horribly everyday
To them it’s just a nasty little game
All he wants is for people to be kind
No more pent up feelings to hide, he prays
He just would like all to be treated the same
For people to open their eyes, not to be blind
For happiness and good to shine its sunny rays
But these people he will not tame
Changing their spots is hard he finds…
This is my first dabble at a sonnet so I hope I have it right? Any feedback or help is grateful on this.
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Darren Greenidge
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Caliburnus Rises 
Maybe if he never lets them get to him, they will change and get tamed to him
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Looks wonderful to me (but I am not an English major).
Thank you Randall. A sonnet is very complex to do. Shakespeare’s were 14 lines & I did 16. Also I rhymed every 4 lines, not every 2 which he did, but there is freestyle type too. It’s all to do with iambic pentameter which I don’t remember learning at secondary school. It is an art form to master in the poetry world as is the Haiku form. I think what I did was very basic but I put it out there anyway as feedback it very helpful. Thanks again Randall.